I decide to take to the stroke element out of the story, since people felt confused.  And the story of the sisters is the story I want to keep the most!  

Now its about two sister that don't spend enough time with each other, and only forced to share a bedroom together.  And their differences and falling out commences.  Eventually they got their own room back, and realised how lonely they were.

I feel like I can have more fun with this story, and put my own personal experiences into it.

Hopefully this will be my final draft of my story.

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